The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
The given bar chart compares the worldwide pineapple exports of the top three harvesting countries in 2009 and 2019 , meanwhile the pie chart represents what costs were included into the retail price of each pineapple for a customer in 2019.
Overall, the export trends were steadily increasing in all three countries during the period. With Country A ranking the first, country B ranking the second and country C ranking the last at the end of the period. The breakdown of the cost of each pineapple consisted of 7 expenses, the biggest expense was given to distribution and retail.
In regard to the bar chart, at the start of the period country A was responsible for a million of metric tonnes exported, meanwhile country B supplied 1,5 million tones to the global market. Meanwhile, country C had exported around a third of a million tons, before the 2009 ended. In 2019, country A became the leading supplier of pineapples, exporting around 10 millions of metric tonnes. Furthermore, country B’s exports doubled compared to ten year before. Country had similar results, it’s international exports reached 0.6 millions of tons.
In terms of the cost breakdown, the pie chart illustrates that distribution and retail were responsible for 35% of the whole price for a consumer. Taxes took around 16% and profit was around 18% of the cost of each pineapple. The section producer accounted at 5% of the total price along with export costs at 4%. International transport took slightly more than a tenth of the price and import licences costed exactly 10% of the price of each pineapple.
The essay provides a clear overview of the data but lacks smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Separate the description of the bar chart and pie chart into distinct paragraphs.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary accurately but lacks some variety and precision.
The essay demonstrates an adequate range of grammatical structures but contains several errors.
The essay addresses the task by summarizing the key features of the charts but lacks detail in some areas.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points from the charts.
- Ensure all key features are described clearly.
- Avoid repetition and ensure all information is relevant.