the cost of 4 brad types
The given line graph compares the cost, in euros, of 800 grams of four different bread varieties in a European nation between 2001 and 2006. Overall, the data reveals a notable increase in the average price of most bread types, with Brown bread experiencing remarkable growth. Wholegrain bread, however, was the only figure to see a decline in the cost.
Starting from increases, at the beginning of the period, the cost of Brown, White and Rye was the same, cost at 0.6 euros in 2006. Next, the cost of Brown bread rose significantly to approximately 1.5, and the figure for the white bread followed a similar trend, reaching 1 euro. Despite declining slightly to 1.4-euro, Brown bread’s cost climbed to 1.6 euro at the end of the period. The cost of white bread showed a continuous climb, going to 1.3 euros in 2006. Additionally, after dipping moderately, the average cost of Rye bread increased significantly, reaching around 0.7 euro in 2005.
However, the cost of wholegrain bread experienced a dramatic increase, peaking at 1.8 euros in 2002, before declining sharply to 0.7 euros. After that, the price of wholegrain bread increased minimally to 0.8 by the end of the period.
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Add more linking words for better flow.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect.
The vocabulary is appropriate but lacks variety.
Generally accurate grammar with some minor errors.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some key details.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points from the graph.
- Provide a clearer summary of overall trends.
- Ensure all bread types are equally discussed.