the cost of 4 different type of bread
The given line graph compares the cost, in euros, of 800 grams of four different bread variety in a European nation between 2001 and 2006. Overall, the data reveals a notable increase from most the average price of bread types, with Brown bread experiencing the remarkable growth. Wholegrain bread, however, was the only figure to see a decline in the cost.
Starting from increases, the trend for the Brown, White and Rye breads started the period at the same cost at 0.6 euros in 2001. Next, the cost of Brown bread rose significantly to approximately 1.5, and the figure for the white bread followed the same trend, reaching up to 1 euro. Despite declining slightly to 1.4-euro, Brown bread’s cost climbed to 1.6 euro at the end of the period. Then, the cost of white bread showed a continuous climb, going up to 1.3 euros in 2006. Additionally, after dipped moderately, the average cost of Rye bread increased significantly, exhibited at around 0.7 euro in 2005.
However, the figure for the wholegrain bread, before declining sharply to 0.7 euro, it experienced a dramatic growth in the cost of bread, reaching to its peak at 1.8 euro in 2002. After that, the price of wholegrain bread increased minimally to 0.8 at the end of the period.
The essay presents information logically, but there are some issues with cohesion and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between ideas.
- Ensure all comparisons are accurate and consistent with the graph.
- Avoid fragmented sentences.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some errors.
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures but contains several grammatical errors.
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview but lacks some detail and accuracy in descriptions.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data described matches the graph accurately.
- Provide a clearer overview of the trends.