The diagram below shows about reproduce aluminium cans
A glance at the process sustained indicates us the categories of recycling process of cans that made from aluminium.
Overall, it can be evidently seen that this process includes seven main steps from wasted cans to being ready to reuse them.
It is obvious from the diagram that after using from aluminium cans once, humans put them into bins. Special big trucks collect them from bins and delivered factories. Then, inside the factories brought cans cleared, sorted according to their conditions or types, shredded and compressed.
At the next step cans are heated with high temperature in a huge pot and converted into liquid form. After, they are rolled with from 2.5 mm up to 6mm thickness. Then, they are turned into cans again and they are ready to reuse, 74 percent recycling is done in United Kingdom
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the recycling process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect the overall clarity.
The essay provides a clear overview of the recycling process of aluminum cans and describes each stage of the process. However, the essay does not provide any specific details or examples, and the description is a bit too general.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more specific details and examples to support your main points.
- Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task prompt.