the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The flow chart illustrates the process by which instant noodles are manufactured. Overall, the process begins with storing flour ,followed by mixing water and oil to it and various stages of processing ,culminating in packing noodles with labels and seals on it. Most of the stages take place in one factory with little use of manual labour.
The first step involves bringing flour to storage silos in trucks, after which it is mixed with and oil using a special machine. The mixture is then flattened with rollers ,where it becomes dough sheets. During this process, the dough sheets are sliced into strips and then made noodles discs. Once noodles discs are prepared, they are are are cooked in oil and,after which they are dried.
Following the cooking process,These noodles are then packed in to blank cups. The final step involves labeling every cup and sealing them after with instant noodles being ready to be sold in supermarkets.
The essay presents a logical sequence of the manufacturing process, but there are issues with the use of cohesive devices and clarity.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between steps.
- Ensure all stages are mentioned explicitly.
- Avoid repetition for smoother flow.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some word choices are repetitive or awkward.
There are frequent grammatical errors that affect understanding and accuracy.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed description of some stages and contains inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Ensure all steps are described accurately.
- Avoid unnecessary repetition.
- Include more detail about each stage.