The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process shows how instant noodles were produced.The Production is generally done in 8 steps starting with preservation insilos and ending with labeling and seaing product.Almost all stages had been done one conveyor excpet for initial stage.Another noticable feature is that alll work on factory is automated by machines without any help by people.
The initial work begins with storing silos which was being filled by using special car that contain flour, then it was mixed before being rolled into it was added water and oil.After it was reformed to dough sheets and divided into a lot of strips.
The subsequent stages prepare the final product.First off, the dough strips was formed to discs after what was cooked in oil.The ready discs are being dried before it was distributed betwen cups also on this stage into cups were added vegetables and spices to give taste to the product.After all, cups being wrapped into labels and sealed.
The essay presents a basic sequence of the manufacturing process but lacks smooth transitions and clear paragraphing.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Separate the text into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure each stage is clearly connected to the next.
The essay uses basic vocabulary with some repetition and minor errors.
There are several grammatical errors, including incorrect tense usage and sentence fragments.
The essay covers the main stages of the process but lacks detailed explanations and comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about each stage.
- Make relevant comparisons where applicable.