The diagram below shows one way of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The pictures illustrate the process of making ceramic pots. Overall, there are three primary stages in this process, beginning with the excavation of raw materials, followed by producing actual pots, and lastly, colouring the final products. It is also clear that, the process is a complex one, as it takes much time and equipment to complete.
The initial steps of the process are fairly simple. Firstly, raw materials are excavated, which then are delivered to the factory. Once there, the raw materials are put in a special machine and then crushed. After this the crushed materials are mixed with water. After being moulded, the clay is then dried for 4-6 hours. Once the clay pots are assembled, they are then put in an oven at 1000 celsius.
The next step of the process starts when, the clay pots are colored. Subsequent to this, the colored pots are fired in an oven. Finally, the colored ceramic pots are ready for sale.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between steps could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between stages.
- Ensure each step is distinctly described.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there is room for more specific terminology related to the process.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay successfully addresses the task by describing the manufacturing process of ceramic pots, covering all major steps.
Suggestions
- Ensure all steps are covered with sufficient detail.