The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007.
The maps compare a costal area called Pentland in 1950 and in 2007.
Overall, the area had transformed from an essentially factory site with a substantial grassland to a town with improved entertainment, shopping and residential facilities.
in 1950, Pentland was divided into eastern and western sides by way of a main road leading to the sea. On the eastern side, there was a car park, with the factory premises being located to the west. Below these structures, both sides of the area were covered with grasses.
By 2007, major changes had occured across the area. The factory buildings, closer to the ocean, were demolished to make way for a park, a swimming pool, and a multi-story carpark that were interconnected with each other. The north-east part of Pentland had previously been a wasteland, which was occupied by high-rise apartments until 2007.
The southern part of the coastal area also experienced considerable changes. The most notable modification was the construction of side roads perpendicular to the original road. While a row of shops were erected at the top of these sideroads, a cinema was introduced to the south-west corner. Finally, south-east corner of the site was devoted to lines of houses.
The essay is generally well-organized with clear progression. It uses linking words effectively, but there are minor issues with sentence flow.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking phrases to enhance flow.
- Ensure logical progression between sentences.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with some attempts to use less common words. However, there are occasional inaccuracies.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors in punctuation and spelling.
The essay effectively addresses the task, describing the main features and changes in Pentland from 1950 to 2007.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details from the diagram for completeness.