The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram shows the development tools in the Stone Age. It compares between Tool A or 1.4 milion years age and Toll B also called the 0.8 million years age tools. It also gives multiple aspect of views from front, side and back view.
In general, both of them have the same size, approximately around 5 centimeters. The colour is slightly different, the 1.4 milion years has darker colour than the 0.8 milion years. The other interesting aspect is the shape.
From the front view, Tool B looks more round-shaped than Tool A. From the surface structure, tool B get more coarse or rough at the side of the tool then tool A. At the back view, they have same different from the front view. On the other hand When we take a look from the side view, Tool B gives slimmer shape from tool B.
In conclusion, there are so many different between tool A that i solder than tool B. It covers several factor such as colour, shape and th surface structure. But the only same factor that they have is just the size of the tools.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of your writing.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more precise comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the diagram to support your comparisons and to provide a more detailed analysis.
- Make sure to use precise language when making comparisons.