The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The picture illustrates the process by which olive oil is produced. It can be clearly seen that there are seven steps in the process, starting from picking the olives from the tree and ending with selling the olive oil in supermarkets and shops.
In the initial stages of the process, after the olives have been picked from the tree, they are rinsed with cold water. Then, the olives are crushed, and the resulting mixture is smashed further. After being smashed, the olives are divided into two parts: olive paste and olive stones.
Next, the olive paste is placed into perforated bags, which are then pressed to extract oil and water. Afterward, the mixture is separated into two components: oil and water. Subsequently, the olive oil is stored and sold in supermarkets and shops so that it can be used for commercial purposes.
The essay is well-organized, following the sequence of the process accurately. However, transitions between some steps could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each step is clearly connected to the next.
- Add a summary sentence to conclude the process.
The vocabulary is appropriate for describing the process, though it could be more varied.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively describes the process, covering all key stages accurately.
Suggestions
- Ensure all steps are described with equal detail.
- Highlight the importance of each step in the process.