The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The picture illustrate the steps involved in producing olive oil.
Overall, it can be seen that there are seven steps in the process, from picking olive fruits from tree to selling their oil at supermarkets.
In the initial stages of the process,the olives are picked before being rinsed them with cold water. Once the olives have been belted,and they are then smashed into two products like olive paste and olive stones.
After being bagged with holes, the olive pastes are then pressed in order to be separated from oil and water.
The last step is that, the oil is taken to stores so that it can be sold to customers.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but there are some issues with the clarity of connections between steps.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps.
- Ensure each step is clearly described.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and minor errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail in some steps and contains minor inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more detail for each step.
- Ensure all steps are clearly and accurately described.