The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the process by which olive oil is produced.
Overall, it can be seen that there are seven steps in the process, from collecting fruits from olive trees to packaging and sale of the finished product.
The first step is that farmers harvest olives from trees and took them to a rinsing machine. After being washed in a cold water olives are sent to another in order to be smashed and separated from its seeds. At this point, the machine ground olives into a paste and the olive stones are removed.
Once the olive paste has been ready then it is put in the special bag with holes which help it to press with another machine. Followed by next process where any excess water is separated from the oil. And finally, last step is to package the olive oil and deliver to shops and malls where it can be sold.
The essay follows a logical sequence but lacks clear transitions between some steps.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more explicitly.
- Ensure each step is clearly connected to the next.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some clarity in descriptions.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons where relevant.
- Ensure each process step is clearly explained.