The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The process illustrates how aluminum cans are recycled. Overall, there are 6 main steps, starting with collecting used aluminum cans and ending with an end product for public use. The cycle shows that aluminum cans are recycled efficiently, with a significant proportion (74%) reused in the UK.
In the first steps, cans are prepared for the recycling process. In the beginning, used cans are collected from recycling trash bins by special trucks and transported to a recycling facility. After that, gathered cans are cleaned and sorted into categories before shredding and compressing, preparing them for the next stage.
Once cleaned and compressed, the aluminum undergoes heating and melting, transforming it into a liquid form. After this stage, molten aluminum is rolled into sheets with a thickness from 2.5 mm to 6 mm, making it suitable for manufacturing new cans. Finally, the recycled aluminum is reused to produce new cans, completing the cycle.
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