The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The process illustrates the recycling of aluminum cans. Overall, it is clear that this process involves multiple steps, namely, collection, transportation, processing materials, shaping, and selling the final products.
The first step involves the proper disposal of used cans in designated trash bins. The collected cans are then gathered by trucks and transported to a recycling center, where they are carefully cleaned and sorted according to their colors, sizes, and shapes. Next, they are shredded into smaller pieces for better compression, after which they are compressed into larger chunks.
In the subsequent step, the cleaned and compressed aluminum is subjected to heating and melting. The molten aluminum is then shaped into rolls. Finally, the aluminum is repurposed to create new cans, completing the recycling loop.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is appropriate and the progression of the essay is smooth.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is used appropriately and accurately.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are few, if any, grammatical errors, and these do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also presents a clear and well-developed position, but the use of symbols like $ is confusing.