The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The diagram below depicts the process of recycling the aluminium cans.Overall, the eleven-steps process takes six weeks and starts with the collection of the cans and their delivery to the deposit, where they undergo several stages of processing in order to obtain new aluminium cans.
At the first stage, the cans from the waste are collected with the bin lorries and are taken to the deposit. Next, they are washed with water and are crushed into a large pile. After that, the material is processed and the substance is erased with chemicals.
At the seventh step, the resulting substance is heated, and then the heated mass is put into mould for the mass to obtain the form of the can. At the next stage, the cans are weighed, followed by rolling the cans with a roller. Finally, the newly manufactured cans with the labels on them are ready to use.
The essay provides a clear sequence of steps and maintains logical progression. However, some transitions between steps could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Clearly distinguish each stage of the process.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the recycling process. Some repetition and lack of variety are present.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively describes the recycling process, covering all steps shown in the diagram.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all stages are clearly described and connected.