The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The pictures show the recycling process of aluminum cans, which takes approximately six weeks. The process consists of 11 stages starting from collection of waste and ending with preparation of new cans for selling. The diagram is a complex one, which requires much time and equipment to complete.
In the first stage, utilized aluminum cans are gathered. Once waste cans have been loaded into trucks, they are then delivered to a deposit. After that they are washed in a special containers in order to be removed their dirt. Next , washed cans are crushed into smaller one before being sent another process.
Following the crushing stage, the aluminum pieces are erased with chemical substances. After being melted in a high temperature, they are poured into special molds so that they can have new forms.
Subsequently, the molds are weighed to ensure the correct amount of material is used. The following step is that aluminum is rolled in a rolling machine. Finally, recycling aluminum cans are delivered all places , which is need these productions.
The essay follows the sequence of the recycling process but lacks smooth transitions between stages.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps.
- Ensure each step is clearly connected to the next.
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some attempts at variety.
There are several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures.
The essay describes the process but lacks some detail and clarity in certain stages.
Suggestions
- Include more details about each stage.
- Ensure each step is clearly explained.
- Verify that all stages from the diagram are mentioned.