The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The flow chart illustrates the process of how aluminium cans are recycled.
Overall, it is clear that the process of recycling aluminium cans can be divided into two main sets of stages: those in the chemical treatment and those in forming. In order to recycle cans, aluminium, chemicals, and water are needed. The flow chart shows that the process requires relatively little specialized equipment, including a crusher, oven, and rolling machine. Altogether, the process requires six weeks in order to be completed.
Firstly, waste is delivered to the deposit where it passes through water treatment in order to be cleaned. Secondly, utilized cans are crushed, after which a process is involved, where they are mixed and treated with chemicals.
After the chemical treatment has been done, the aluminium substance is heated and formed in a mould. Eventually, once aluminium cans are weighed, they can be wrapped in a roller.
Following this, the actual cans recycling takes place.
The essay presents the stages of the recycling process in a logical sequence, but lacks clarity in connecting the stages effectively.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of stages.
- Ensure each stage is clearly described.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate to the task, but some terms could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a basic range of grammatical structures with some errors.
The essay addresses the task and describes the process, but lacks some detail and clarity.
Suggestions
- Include more details about each stage.
- Ensure all stages are clearly described.