The diagram gives information about recycling process of aluminium cans

The process below demonstrate the reproducing process of aluminium Cons
Overall it can be seen thout there are seven stages in this process.
In the first stage, people are buy aluminium co cans and dorink it ag and drop the recycling box. And, garbage car is collected the aluminium cans and arrived the to the factory, And then, aluminitam cans are cleaning, sorting, shredding and compressing. After that, aluminium cans are obropped into the box and heating oond melting.
The the Following this process, in the fuce stage, all alu aluminium coins are rolling to 2.6mmy from 2,5 mm to 6mm thick. And then, aluminium coins are ready and put the logos this cans. Finally, everyone can be use the aluminium cans.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling.

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of articles and prepositions.

The essay provides an overview of the recycling process for aluminium cans and clearly outlines the seven stages. However, there are some inaccuracies in the description of each stage.