The diagram gives information about recycling process of aluminium cans
The given diagram below illustrates the phase of making how recycling aluminum including seven steps, beginning with using cans and ending with reusing in UK for aboutn 74 percent recycled.
The first step of this,all cans are collected in one machine and it deliveries to another basic place.
Following that it is went to the cleaning,sorting,shredding and compressing.
Meanwhile,all the waste cans are cleaned in this step and also seperated from each other and shreeding then.
After that,prepared product is heated and melted under the high temperature.
Next,when it is ready,it is arounded for it forms of rolling.
The thick of rolling should be under about 2,5 mm-6 mm respectively.
And then it goes to the recycling phase of the given process.Prepared can is leaved in ond plasd in order to dry and to be set.Finally,After all the steps under the 74% recycled reusing is prepared in UK
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