The diagram gives information about recycling process of aluminium cans
The diagram illustrates the recycling process of aluminium cans .
Overall, we can see that diagram illustrates process of aluminium recycle which have seven process.
Fitrat of all, people put used cans for bin and after that ,track bring these used cans and went to the cleaning ,sorting shredding and compressing these used cans .Than ,these used cans heating and melting in special mechine.
Seving of all, these liquid freezing and rolling to 2.5mm and 6mm thick.After that ,from rolling material recycling new aluminium cans and at the end, these cans painted and get ready to reusing for consume.
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The essay has a logical flow of information and ideas. However, there are some issues with the sequencing of ideas that make the essay a bit confusing.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you follow a logical sequence of ideas throughout the essay.
- Use cohesive devices appropriately to link ideas within and between paragraphs.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary but there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and issues with sentence structure that can make it difficult to understand.
The essay provides an overview of the recycling process of aluminium cans as illustrated in the diagram. However, the essay contains several errors and inaccuracies that affect the understanding of the process.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you fully understand the process before writing about it. This will help you avoid inaccuracies in your description.
- Review your work for errors and inaccuracies.