The diagram illustrates how recycled paper is made
The diagram below shows how recycled paper is produced. Overall, there four main stages involved in this process, starting with making pulp and this is followed by filtering. After this, the pulp is cleaned, before the paper is made. Also, the process is a simple one, which doesn’t require much time and equipment to complete.
Initially, the used paper is brought in the boxes on the conveyor belt to water chemicals, where the used paper is turned into the pulp. The pulp is then filtered through utensil with loads of tiny holes where its large and tough pieces are caught. Once filtered, the pulp is washed in the soaped water, and the ink is taken from it. Once cleaned, the pulp is pushed towards water and chemicals using air pressure.
In the final stage, the cleaned pulp is put on to the conveyor belt, which is then pulled by heated rollers so that existing water on the pulp can be leaked. The cleaned pulp is turned from the rugged form into the straight one.
The essay presents a logical sequence of the recycling process, but the connections between stages could be clearer. Transitions between steps are sometimes abrupt, and there is a slight lack of cohesion.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify the sequence of steps.
- Ensure each stage is clearly connected to the next.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. Some terms are repeated, and there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice.
The essay demonstrates a basic range of grammatical structures with some errors. There are issues with articles and sentence structure.
The essay addresses the task by describing the process in a logical sequence. However, some details could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Include more precise details from the diagram.
- Ensure all steps are clearly described.