The diagram shows how biofuel called ethanol produced
The diagramm below gives information about the ways of making a biofuel called ethanol is produced. From looking the overall, it is clear that process is consisted of ten main categories. Assambly line is produced by both human-made and natural processes. That ruquires two main sources, sunlight and carbon dioxide. Moreover, vehicles take a part to make ethanol.
Firstly, plants and trees absorb energy which is from sunlight and Carbon Dioxide (CO2). In the following period, grown trees or plants are harvested by vehicles when they are nutritional enough. After that, ready crops are cut into piece by machine, in order to be cellulosed. The next process called “processing”, there yields are added some biochemicals. Before microbes are added for to be unsafe, ingredients are turned into sugar.
At the next steps, ready Ethanol is devided into three different groups (car, truck and air plane) as provides with fuels which are produced naturally. Vehicles transform it into CO2 and that line continues in the long run.
The essay attempts to describe the process but lacks clear logical flow and organization. There are abrupt transitions and some unclear connections between stages.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clearly separate each stage of the process.
- Ensure each step logically follows the previous one.
The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes incorrect, with several spelling errors.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures detract from clarity.
The essay attempts to cover the main stages but lacks detail and clarity in describing the process.
Suggestions
- Clearly describe each stage of the process.
- Include all relevant details from the diagram.
- Ensure the description accurately reflects the diagram.