The diagram shows how biofuel called ethanol produced
The process below illustrates how a biofuel called ethanol is manufactured.
In general, it requires 8 stages to produce ethanol. We can see that ethanol is made using 2 main energy sources, sunlight and carbon dioxide. In addition, vehicles produce CO2, and it proceeds.
At the firts stage in the production of ethanol, energy, (sunlight and carbon dioxide) is required to growth of the plants and trees. Then, these natural goods are harvested with tractors, and these timbers bring to the pre-processing. After that, they cellulosed, as well as passes through processing, and added some chemicals.
Then, that processed celluloses are converted to sugar. Finally, microbes and germs are added to the sugar to create ethanol. Next, this biofuel, used as a petrol for different types of vehicles, including trucks, cars, and planes also. After that, these vehicles produce carbon dioxide, eventually this carbon dioxide become an energy source for plants as well as trees, and this process continues.
The essay has a basic structure but lacks clarity in the sequence of stages. Transitions between stages are not well-defined, making it difficult to follow the process clearly.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transition words to connect stages.
- Ensure each stage is described logically and sequentially.
- Avoid abrupt shifts between ideas.
The essay uses basic vocabulary with some repetition. There are occasional errors in word choice and formality.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures.
The essay provides a general overview of the ethanol production process but lacks detail and precision in describing each stage.
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- Include more specific details about each stage of the process.
- Ensure all stages are mentioned and described accurately.