The diagram shows how biofuel called ethanol produced
The given diagram demonstrates process of biofuel named ethanol is how produced.
Overall, the process consists nine stages. Starting from harvesting trees and plants which have natural energy and ending with usage of ethanol by vehicles and producing carbon dioxide by vehicles.
First stage of producing ethanol includes plants and trees which are grown. They are transported by energy from CO2 and sunlight. Then, when plants and trees grow enough, they are harvested by machines and it is brought to pre-processing to cellulose them. In the stage of cellulose it is crushed to pieces
In the next stage, pieces of cellulose are sent to real processing. In this stage it is turned over liquid. After that it is mixed with sugars before microbes are added and biofuel called ethanol is produced. Finally, it is used by cars, trucks and planes and from all type of vehicles is manufactured carbon dioxide to air. Process is been again.
The essay attempts to describe the process but lacks clear logical progression and has issues with cohesion.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify each stage of the process.
- Ensure each sentence logically follows the previous one.
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with some word choices being incorrect.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex structures.
The essay attempts to cover the process but lacks detail and clarity in some stages.
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- Provide more details for each stage.
- Ensure all stages are clearly explained.