The diagram shows how to make jam from the fruit
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the process of making jam from fruit.
Overall,this making jam process involves six main stages,from running water to family having breakfast.
At the first stage,the fruit is runner with water to make it clean for the next step, after that cleaned fruit transitted to the next step,where it is mashed.In the next stage,in order for to be ladled,mashed fruit transitted to the next step.In there,mashed fruit is then subjected to high temperature cooking where it is dadled for ten minutes during which,some ingredients,one cup water, one cup from the four cups sugar and two tbsp peanuts are added to enhance its flavor and consistency.
Subsequently,the mixture is is ladled in the high temperature again for half hour during which, four cups water and two cups more sugar are added to it as a extra.The mixture is the transitted to the next step where it is poured in different containers, after that all containers are closed with lid and in order for to be sent ,the jam is kept for one hour.After this process,this jam is prepared for family’s having it in their breakfast.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the process. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are some inaccuracies in the use of words and phrases.
The essay contains a number of grammatical errors and there is some confusion in the use of tenses.
The essay provides a detailed description of the process of making jam from fruit. However, there are some inaccuracies in the use of words and the description of the process could be improved by providing a more detailed explanation of each step.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you understand the process and the steps involved in making jam from fruit.
- Provide a detailed description of each step in the process, making sure to use the correct terminology.