The diagram shows the formation of supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture represents how does supervolcanoes erupt in stages. The process starts when the pressure pushes magna until it’s eruption and ends with some changes on surface.
To begin with, several fissures are emerged and goes down through crust. By the time, magma pushes itself through mantle reaching crust. After times, magma which was pushed begins accumulating and increasing itself into crust until latitude of the fissures reaches this cumulation. Once the cumulation have been crossed paths, a pressure under mantle starts pushing magma through holes. When the pressure have pushed it enough hard, eruptions is started. In the process of it, a lot of smoke and lava go out through the holes. The process is being continued until the time when the pressure under crust reduces. After supervolcanoes’ eruption, unevenness are formed, which means there was eruption.
To close with, according the diagram, magma pushed by pressure underground goes though holes and erupt with lava and smoke. Nevertheless, at the end of the process, instead of the holes there appear unevenness.
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the logical flow is interrupted by unclear transitions and lack of clarity in some descriptions.
Suggestions
- Improve logical flow by using clear transitional phrases.
- Ensure each stage is clearly described and linked to the next.
- Clarify the sequence of events in the process.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision. Some words are used incorrectly, affecting clarity.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and subject-verb agreement issues.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed explanations of each stage. Comparisons are minimal and not effectively integrated.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of each stage.
- Include comparisons where relevant, such as differences in pressure or magma movement.