The diagram shows the formation of supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the formation process of supervolcanoes, involving multiple stages, from movement of magma to significant changes in the landscape.
Initially, the process begins with the accumulation of magma in chamber which is located in the earth’s crust. This is followed by, the rising of the magma magma chamber from the mantel, which leads to increased pressure and then it fissures to form on the earth’s surface. After the fissuring, magma builds up significantly in order to emit smoke and launch lava which called eruption.
In the final stage, the mantle level is reduced thanks to eruption, creating land depression on the earth surface compared to its original state.
The essay presents the stages of supervolcano formation in a logical sequence, but lacks clear connections between stages.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect stages clearly.
- Summarize the process more effectively.
- Ensure each stage is distinct and easy to follow.
The vocabulary is adequate but repetitive, with some errors in word choice.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect clarity.
The essay summarizes the diagram but lacks detailed comparisons and some clarity in descriptions.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between stages.
- Ensure all main features of the diagram are clearly described.