The diagram shows the formation of supervolcano and the stages involved. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram demonstrates the process involved in the formation of supervolcano and stages consisted of.
Overall, it consists of 4 stages where begins with accumulation of magma under the earth’s surface and culminates in a strong volcanic eruption as a result of reduces magma size.
Initially, magma rises beneath mantle and collects in a large chamber in a crust. Over time, pressure build up magma chamber to accumulate.After that it expands due to pressure in a magma chamber and pressure in a crust causes fissures in surface.
After that,magma rises beneath crust to surface and because of eruption, it leads to release of smoke and lava to atmosphere. Finally, magma leads to land depression and in crust, it’s size is decrease because of eruption.
The essay presents the stages in a logical order but lacks clear linking devices and cohesive markers.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each stage is clearly defined and distinct.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between stages.
The vocabulary is basic with limited range and some repetition.
The essay contains grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay covers the main stages but lacks detailed explanations and comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of each stage.
- Include relevant comparisons between stages.
- Ensure all key features are addressed.