The diagram shows the process of producing edible oils and fats, and margarine. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing edible oils, fats, and margarine. Overall, this process involves multiple stages, starting from collecting raw materials, and ending with the sale of finished products in the supermarket.
The initial stage begins with, gathering raw materials, such as sunflower seeds and coconuts, which are transported to a factory called a Silo. Once the materials arrive at the factory, they undergo the crushing and milling process using a special machine with the aim of extracting oils. After pressing the oils, they are filtered and steamed to prepare them for subsequent stages.
The oils are then categorized into three types, including sunflower, coconut, and refined oil which can become edible oils and fats.
All the ready oils, finally, are transported by special machine to the supermarkets or shops, where customers can purchase them.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but lacks clear connections between stages.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect stages.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more explicitly.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with occasional repetition.
The essay demonstrates a basic range of grammatical structures with some errors.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and specific information from the diagram.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons of the different oil types.
- Mention the role of margarine in the process.