The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium
The process gives information about the aliminium cans how remade
At the first glanced at there are totaly seven stage starts from used tin bootles picked up from trash boxes’ to aliminium garbage lorrys’ machines’ and in the end of process ends with ready to sell or use again tin cans
Firstly, rubbish tins leave out by inhabitants and pick up by collection trash vehicles’ from every single dust bins’. After that collection of aliminium cans bringing to factory, while used bootles separate to four types such as cleaning, sorting, with shredding. After three process have fineshed tins pressed by compressing machine with strong pressure, before ready to heating and melting rughly 500 degree celsiy techniquie. Moreover after melting changed to rolling about 2.5 mm with 6mm thick before recycling step rools become diffrent to recyclig tin
Finally, ready to use aliminium cans labelled by factory name and in UK 74 percantage of aliminium cans remaded
Abdumalik Jo’rayev
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. There are frequent errors in paragraphing and linking devices.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Use linking words to connect ideas logically.
- Ensure each stage of the process is clearly described.
The vocabulary is limited and there are frequent spelling errors. Some words are used incorrectly.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay attempts to describe the process but lacks clarity and detail in some stages.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed descriptions of each stage.
- Ensure accuracy in the description of the process.