The diagram shows the stages in the process of canning fruit. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows the process of canning fruit through 4 stages and 13 steps.
This process begins with harvesting the fruits from gardens and sending them to the factory. When products are arrived to the factory and ready for the process, second stage starts. First, fruits are accurately washed and checked: are they suitable to be canned and marinated. So, when they are sorted according to their quality, good ones are sent to the next step of producing and the bad ones, which are rejected, are sent to farmers or animal-owners to use rejected fruits for feeding their animals. In the next step, where only the best fruits are kept, their peel is moved out and sent to the third stage.
Third stage starts with cutting apples into small slices. Once apples are cut into small slices, we move to the next step – filling the cans with slices of fruits and adding some syrup. Then, these cans are sealed and heated on gas or fire. Now, we can move to the final fourth stage of canning fruits – labeling and transporting. After cans are labelled, they are sent to the store and to the local shops and cafés from that storage.
The essay follows a logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and some linking words.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Separate the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure each stage is clearly distinct.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with some errors.
The essay addresses the task by summarizing the process but lacks detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more comparisons between stages.
- Highlight differences in processing steps.