The diagram shows the stages in the process of canning fruit. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of cunning apples. Overall, the process involves multiple stages, beginning with the harvesting of apples and culminating with the distribution of finished canned product.
The initial stage begins with the collecting apples from garden and then they are transported by truck to the factory where apples are cleaned with water before checking them meticulously. At this point, tested apples are sorted one by one, creating feed for animals through the fruit rejects.
Next, the apples are peeled and cut into slices. A syrup solution is added to the slices, and the apples are placed into cans. After sealing the cans, they are subjected to a sterilization process involving heat to ensure proper preservation.
In the final stage, all fruit cans are labeled by special machine in order to place in special box. These products are packaged and distributed to shops or cafes where customers can purchase them.
The essay follows a logical sequence, but some transitions between stages could be clearer.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between stages.
- Include linking words to enhance flow.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors.
The essay adequately summarizes the process but lacks detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more comparisons and specific details about each stage.