The garph below shows the percentage of female students on four different courses at one university from 1970to 2015
The graph illustrates the percentage of female students enrolled in four courses—law, medicine, physics, and computer science at a university from 1970 to 2015.
Overall, the percentage of women in law, medicine, and physics increased significantly over the period, while computer science experienced a rise initially but declined after 1990. Among the courses, law had the highest proportion of female students by 2000.
In 1970, only 5% of law students were women, but this figure rose dramatically to 90% by 2000, remaining steady until 2005 before experiencing a slight decline. Similarly, female participation in medicine grew steadily from 20% in 1970 to 80% in 2015.
Physics saw a more gradual increase, starting at 10% in 1970 and reaching 60% by 2015. However, in computer science, the percentage of female students rose moderately from 30% in 1970 to 40% in 1985, after which it declined sharply to 20% by the end of the period.
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