The graph below gives information about the common activities children of different ages in the United States do as part of their bedtime routines. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates five most common bedtime habits practiced by children of three different age groups (1-3 years, 4-5 years, and 6-8 years) in the US.
Overall, it is evident that the majority of American children of all ages given in the chart usually engage in reading before going to bed, while eating is the least popular activity with them.
Looking into the details, the most popular bedtime habit—reading—is done mostly by 4-5-year-old children, being at the top with 70%; as they age, they start to read less, with children aged 1-3 making up around 65% and 6-8 years under 60%. Brushing teeth before going to bed, on the other hand, despite being the second most common activity, the only age group that exceeds 50% is the oldest group of children, with approximately 53%, which is followed by 4-5 and then 1-3 years, with 45 and 30 percent, respectively.
Slightly more than 40% of toddlers (1-3 years) have a bath as a bedtime routine, whereas other age groups make up more than 30 percent but still cannot catch up with the toddlers. Watching TV and eating are the least common habits of children in the US, with only around one fifth of the children doing the former activity before sleeping and around one tenth doing the latter.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression and use of cohesive devices. However, some sentences are complex and could be simplified for clarity.
Suggestions
- Simplify complex sentences.
- Use more varied linking words.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices. There is occasional repetition.
The essay uses a range of grammatical structures with high accuracy. There are minor errors that do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing and comparing the main features of the chart. All relevant information is included.