The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the amount of people living in urban areas of 4 Asian counties from 1970 to 2020, with the forecast for 2030 and 2040. In general, Malaysia seems as the most urbanized country, while Indonesia, Philippines and Thailand have a dynamic differences in population rising.
Delving into details, Malaysia has the constant growth during this given period, initially from 30% to 80% in 2025 and to around 85% in 2040. The second country by the cities population growth is Indonesia, that also has the same by its stability of upward trend: starting in 1970, this country had only 10% of its population living in cities, then in 2020 reached close to 53% and predicted to continue its trend to 60% in 2040.
However, Philippines, that had the same starting point of 30% amount in 1970, had risen its population until 1990 with the amount of 45-50% citizens, reaching its peak, that dropped to 40% in 2010 and again started to increase constantly, so its prognosed to be more than 50% citizens living in this country. Thailand, meanwhile, firstly escaladed its urban population from 19% to 29-30% in 1970 and 1990 respectively, that stayed stable until 2020, but also have a prognosed rise to 45% without any drops in 2040.
The essay generally follows a logical structure but lacks clear transitions between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Clarify comparisons between countries.
The vocabulary range is adequate but lacks precision in some areas.
Frequent grammatical errors affect clarity and precision.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and analysis.
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- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Make clearer comparisons between countries.
- Ensure all main features are covered.