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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.

The line graph illustrates the changes in clothing exports, measured in million of dollars, from three different countries- Colombia , Japan and Myanmar, from 1999 and 2003.
Overall, clothing exports in Myanmar experienced significant fluctuation, while Japan showed steady decline over the years. In contrast, Colombia’s exports generally increased, taking dominant position by the end of a period.
In 1999, Japan had the highest clothing exports figures at approximately 700$ million, followed by Colombia at around 500$ million and Myanmar with no profit at all. Over the next two years, exports from Myanmar had a dramatic growth, reaching its top at around 900$ million, overtaking both Japan and Colombia. However, this growth was for a short period as exports decreased to 400$ million, the lowest among the three countries.
Colombia’s exports steadily increased, passing both Japan and Myanmar in 2002 and taking leading position by 2003 with 600$ million. Nevertheless, Japan experienced overall decrease, dropping from 600$ million in 1999 to around 500$ million by the end of the given period, taking place below the Columbia, but above the Myanmar.

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The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some inconsistencies in the sequencing of details.

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The essay uses an adequate range of vocabulary, but there are some repetitive and awkward expressions.

The essay contains several grammatical errors, particularly with article usage and punctuation.

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant data, but some details are inaccurate or missing.

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