The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph illistrates dynamics of the number of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melboure for the period of 2 decades, from 2000 to 2020.
In general, despite the fact that the most clubs remained a stable number of participants, amateur dramatics club experienced the significant decrease.
From 2000 to 2005, 4 clubs, including film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics and table tennis, had a fluctuating number of participants. However, in 2005 musical performances club was established and in next 5 years gained a popularity among 10 people.
From 2005 to 2010, number of participants in film club and amateur dramatics insignificantly decreased, going down from 65 to 60 and from 30 to 20 respectively. However, the number of participants in martial arts club increased from 30 to 40, while the quantity of participants of table tennis remained 20.
From 2010 to 2015, the most notecable rise in participants experienced the table tennis club, because number of it doubled. It is worth to admit, that number of amateur dramatics continued decreasing and in 2015 reached less then 15 participants, while the number of member of other clubs fluctuated.
Finally, from 2015 to 2020, the overall trends remained largely unchanged. The table tennis club’s membership rose to 55, while the amateur dramatics club saw its numbers fall to fewer than 10 participants.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing for different time periods.
- Add transition words to improve flow.
- Summarize key trends at the end.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect clarity.
The response addresses the task but lacks comprehensive analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between activities.
- Highlight key trends more clearly.
- Ensure all data points are accurately represented.