The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of participants in five different activities—film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances—at a social center in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club consistently maintained the highest popularity, while table tennis showed steady growth. In contrast, musical performances and amateur dramatics lost participants significantly over the period.
Participation in the film club increased marginally from 65 in 2000 to approximately 70 in 2020, maintaining its dominance. Table tennis followed a consistent upward trend, growing from 15 participants in 2000 to about 55 in 2020. Martial arts also increased, peaking at 40 in 2015 before stabilizing.
Meanwhile, table amateur dramatics at 25 participants but experienced a gradual decline, ending at just 5 in 2020. The number of musical performances visitors saw upward , from 10 in 2000 to 19 by the end of the period.
The essay is generally well-organized, but some sentences lack clarity and coherence. The transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use clearer transitions between ideas.
- Ensure each sentence logically follows the previous one.
The vocabulary is appropriate, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
The essay addresses the task, summarizing and comparing main features, but lacks some details.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for all activities.
- Ensure all activities are discussed with similar depth.