the graph below show the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
It illustrates by the graph some information about the amount of visitors That attending in a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.It can be seen tourists were separated in 2 groups beside that total trend
Which was upward.
Initially, for those people that stayed in cruse ships started with half a million And by a steady increased, reached to 2millions tourists in last year,2017. Secondly, others visitors who attended on island started with more visitors In compression with cruse ships although had dramatic rise and was able to Achieve 1.5millions tourist however, in its end was lower than cruse ships visitors Total trend which is contained both the previous line graph at first was on 1millions And the end gained 3.5millions which is evidence of a huge increase in tourists.
In conclusion, even though were some down points but general trend shown Significant increase in total in addion to each part had considerable rise.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that can cause some difficulty for the reader.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding the use of symbols such as $ and $d$
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- Provide more specific details to support your main points.
- Avoid the use of symbols such as $ and $d$
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.