The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.
The statistics illustrate the population increase in 2 countries (India and China) from 2000 and predicted rise 2050. In general, India had a constant growth, while China expected to have a drop in the given timeframe.
Firstly, In the period from 2000 to 2025, both of the countries show the upward trend without any downfalls. With the start of 1 billion for India and 1,25 billions for China, the population escalate to 1.4 billions for the former and nearly 1.45 billions for the latter. However, as it seen, India seems to have sharper progress than China, as the graph shows
Whereas there is a surge in given period for China, after the peak in 2025, this country is predicted to have a decrease until 2050 to the number of less than 1,4 billions of people. However, India have more chance to stable the increase of its population, going up to 1.6 billions of people, according to the information the graphics gives.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but there are issues with cohesion and clarity in some parts.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clarify comparisons between India and China.
- Use paragraphs to separate different time periods.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary, with some repetition and minor inaccuracies.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between India and China.
- Include specific data points to support statements.