The graph below shows that the percentage of Austrilian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The line graph illustrates the proportion of export to four countries namely, Japan, US, China and India from Australia between period of 1990 to 2012.
Overall, despite the biggest numbers at the start Japan received lower percentages over the years, while the China got the biggest export from the Australia, and the US and Indian’s numbers of export fluctuated in this period.
In more details, at the beginning of the year Japan had the biggest numbers in terms of export from Australia between this four countries, with the figures of 26, then it continued with the drop over this years and stopped at the number 18 finally. Moreover, the biggest rise was shown by China that started its’ number of 2 that turned to 28 at its pick initially.
Furthermore about the details, America started at the point 11 and shown a fluctuation over this years, and reached to its pick in the 2000’s and stood at the figure 6 finally, while the one more country that showed the fluctuation was India, that started with the lowest numbers as China but,1 point lower and did not shown the same numbers as that country and shown the fluctuation that stay with the similar numbers in the first 10 years and increased after but, decreased to the number 5 at the end.
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