The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The graph compares four different countries in terms of spending on books over a 10-year period, from 1995 to 2005.
Overall, it is clear that all four countries experienced varying degrees of increase in their book expenditure. We can also see that Germany was the dominant country, spending the highest amount of money on books.
In 1995, Germany spent $80 million on books, and the figure for that country increased by $10 million from 1995 to 1999. Similarly, Austria saw a gradual increase in their book spending, from $30 million to almost $40 million. Even though there was a little fluctuation in the amount of money that Italy spent on books from 1995 to 1999, that figure remained unchanged. The amount of money that France spent on books saw a slight increase from $55 million to roughly $60 million during that period.
Between 2001 and 2005, Austria saw a drastic increase in their book spending, from $40 million to just over $70 million. There was a steady growth in the amount of money that France and Austria spent on books from 1999 to 2005. Germany witnessed a slight increase in the amount of money they spent on books, reaching roughly $95 million.
The essay is well-organized, with a logical progression of ideas. However, some details could be linked more effectively to enhance coherence.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Provide a clearer summary in the conclusion.
- Avoid repetition of similar phrases.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there is room for more precise word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear overview and relevant details.
Suggestions
- Include a brief conclusion summarizing the main trends.