The graph below shows the amount of time taken to produce a vehicle by four US-based car manufacturers in the years 1998 to 2002.
The line graph illustrates how much time different USA car production company allocated to produce a transport over a period of 4 years(1998-2002). Overall, the amount of time to produce a vehicle in all factories saw a noticeable reduction expect for Ford during the analysed years. Additionally, Nissan company initially required the most time to manufacture one car despite getting the lowest production time by the end of the period.
A vehicle production time in two car companies- DC and GM – exhibited consitently low figures throughout the years. In 1999, the former spent 34 hours for one car, which was more than the latter, with 32 hours. The time of DC remained stable with 32 hours from 1999 to 2001 and this was followed by a gradual reduction to 25 hours in the last year(2002).When it comes to GM, its time went down significantly between 32 hours in 1999 and 25 hours in 2002.
In contrast, time of Nissan and Ford followed opposite patterns. Both allocated the most and the least time to produce a transport, 38 and 25 hours respectively, in 1998. Then, Nissan minimized dramatically ptoduction time from 30 in 1999 to 21 hours in 2002 whereas Ford’s time rose steadly between 25 and 27 hours in the same years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good range of linking words. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic. Avoid mixing different ideas in the same paragraph.
- Use a wider range of cohesive devices to make the relationships between ideas clearer.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances where grammar could be improved.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also provides specific details and examples to support the main points. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more detailed comparison of the data. This could involve discussing the reasons for the trends or providing more specific data points.