The graph below shows the amount of time taken to produce a vehicle by four US-based car manufactures in the years 1998 to 2002.
The line graph illustrates how much time four different car manufactures spent to produce a vehicle between 1998 and 2002.
Overall, it is clear that almost every company managed to cut the time that was spent to produce a vehicle, except for Ford during the period. Nissan, however, significantly reduced the amount of time to manufacture a transport.
To begin with the companies, which successfully managed to decrease the time to produce a vehicle. Nissan spent nearly 37 hours per vehicle in 1997. Despite being spent much more time to produced than others in that year, the company dramatically reduced the time to around 21 hours per vehicle in 2002. Similarly, General Motors, the manufacture also showed a drastic decrease from 32 hours in 1998, to around 22 hours in 2002.
Turning to the two other companies, Daimler Chrysler and the Ford spent 34 hours and 22 hours to produce a vehicle, respectively, in 1998. However, these manufactures witnessed opposite trends. The amount of time taken to produce a vehicle by DC dropped to 29 hours per transport, while the figure for Ford saw a slight increase of 2 hours in 2002.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear structure. However, some sentences are awkwardly constructed, affecting the flow.
Suggestions
- Use clear linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Avoid repetitive sentence structures.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some flexibility. There are occasional errors in word choice.
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are noticeable grammatical errors.
The essay addresses the task, summarizing and comparing the main features. Some data points need correction.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points match the graph.
- Provide a more detailed overview of trends.