the graph below shows the amount of waste producted by three companies over a period of 15 years.
The line graph compares the trends of waste generation by three companies namely A, B and C between 2000 and 2015. Overall, the byproduct of waste of company A witnessed a downward trend while the westing generation of company C experienced an opposite trend which was dominant in the final year.
With regards to the amount of waste product of company A, it started at 12 tonnes in the initial year and then dropped to hit a low of roughly 8 tonnes in this category which was dominant in 2000. Similarly, the company B accounted for about 8 tonnes in 2000. Although it rose slightly and reached to approximately 11 tonnes five years later, this level was short-lived, and by 2015 it had fallen to 3 tonnes.
In terms of the figure of company C, it stood at roughly 5 tonnes in 2000 after which rose dramatically to overtake companies A and B which became a dominant figure in 2015.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors and some sentences could be structured more accurately.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and examples to support your main points.