The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
he line graph shows the usage of fish and different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004
Firstly, the consumption of chicken had a slight increase from nearly 150 grans to over 150 grams between 1979 and 1984. In the same period, both lamb and beef had decreasing trends. Beef had a dramatic drop from almost 225 grams to over 150 grams. Moreover, lamb decreased steadily from 150g grams to nearly 100grams. However, fish remained the same number in this period. Fish and lamb remained stable between 1984 and 1989. Chicken and beef had a slight increase. Beef increased from next period of 1989 to 1999, beef dropped steadily from nearly 175 grams to 150 grams. At the same time, lamb decreased dramatically from nearly 100 grams to just over 50 grams. However, chicken increased steadily from nearly 160 grams to 200 grams. Fish still remained stable. Both lamb and chicken had increasing trends between 1999 and 2004. Chicken increased dramatically from 100grams to almost 250 grams. However, beef had a steady decrease from nearly 150 grams to 100grams. Fish remained the same.
Overall, the usage of chicken is the only increasing trend between 1979 and 2004. Both beef and lamb decreases to nearly the half of the first amount. Fish almost remained the same among the whole period.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical flow. Transitions between ideas are not smooth, and there is some confusion in the sequence of events.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different time periods.
- Ensure logical flow by using linking words and phrases.
- Clarify the sequence of events and trends.
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive. There is a lack of variety in word choice, and some terms are used inaccurately.
There are several grammatical mistakes and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited.
The essay attempts to summarize the graph but lacks accuracy and clarity in reporting the main features and comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure accurate reporting of data from the graph.
- Highlight key trends and comparisons clearly.
- Avoid contradictions in the data presented.