The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The line graph provides data about how much fish and various type of meat was consumed by Europeans over a 25- year period from 1979 to 2004.Overall, what is clear from the diagram is that there was an upward trend in the amount of consumption of chicken while the rate of Beef consumption witnessed a remarkable decrease during the period in question.
In 1979, the consumption of Beef was the highest, starting at just above 200 gram per individual. After that, it decreased gradually to just under 200 gramm of beef consumption and fluctuated between 1979 and 1984 then, dropped to just above 100 gramm beef consumption during the last twenty years.After that It reached a peak,at 250 gramm of chiecken consumption during the whole period.
If we look at the figure for the consumption of Chicken stood ju also began just above the line of Beef consumtion , at 150 gramm.However, this line experienced a treble fall instead of growth to just over 50 gramm.In addition to that,there wasno growth in Fish consumption.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical flow. There are abrupt transitions and a lack of clarity in describing trends.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Clearly separate different trends.
- Summarize key points effectively.
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with occasional misuse of words.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect readability.
The essay does not fully address the task requirements. It lacks a comprehensive overview and accurate data interpretation.
Suggestions
- Provide a clear summary of overall trends.
- Include accurate data from the graph.
- Ensure all types of meat are discussed.