The graph below shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985–2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of students of both genders studying IT at university over at 30-year period from1985 to 2015. Overall, the number of boys and girls studying IT started to increase significantly in the middle of the period.
In the early years the proportion of male students increased slightly until 1995. However, after this year, the statistics of male learners increased dramatically and continued to rise until the end of the period.
In a different perspective the number of female students studying IT increased marginally. Starting in 1990 was a substantial growth until reaching approximately 30,000 by 2005. Subsequently between 2005 and 2010 the growth was picked up. Nevertheless, there was a slight decrease until the end.
According to the line graph the number of both gendres of students studying IT at university is almost similar. The main difference between them is decrease the number of female students over the end of the period
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clarity in some comparisons.
Suggestions
- Clarify comparisons between male and female trends.
- Improve paragraph transitions.
- Avoid repetition of ideas.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between male and female trends.
- Highlight key data points from the graph.
- Ensure all main features are covered.