The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
The line graph shows data on how many people visited three different areas in a European country during 20 years .
Overall, visiting to the lakes was the most popular among tourists in 2002 . The number of visitors to the coast increased dramatically from 1992 to 2007 in a European country, while figure for the mountains rised slightly from start to the end of the period.
Looking at the details, as regards the lakes , the number of people who visited to the lakes , went up sharply in the first half of decade and reached a peak in 2002 . If we look at the coast, there was a slight decrease between 1987 and 1992 and then it witnessed a dramatic growth in the last 15 years and in 2007 approximately 75 thousands of people visited to the area. Another interesting point is that visitors to the mountains rised gradually over the whole period
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, overview, and detailed paragraphs. However, some sentences are repetitive or lack smooth transitions.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
- Avoid repetition of similar ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety. Some terms are repetitive, and there are minor errors in word choice.
The essay contains a range of grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and unnecessary words.
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview and details. However, it could include more precise data from the graph.
Suggestions
- Include specific data points from the graph to support statements.
- Ensure all trends are accurately described.