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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The line graph compares the total number of tourists who traveled to a specific Caribbean island over a period of 7 years.
It is clear that total visitors were by far the largest group of tourists over the period shown. This makes it clearer that the number of island-based tourists decreased slightly towards the end.
In 2010, total visitors were the primary source of tourism on the Caribbean island, with millions of guests touring.Cruise-bound visitors and on-island lodgers were just under around 0.9 million visitors of each. Just two years later, the number of guests staying on the island gradually increased, while the number of cruise-bound visitors also saw an upward trend.
Between 2010 and 2017, total tourists visiting a Caribbean island rose dramatically to a peak of 3.5 million visitors.The number of ocean liner passengers remained significantly higher than on-island visitors throughout the period, ranging from 0 to 2 million for the whole 7-year period; also, only 0.8 million visitors in 2010. By 2017, the number of on-island tourists had grown to around 1.5 million, showing a modest increase compared to previous years.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the trends. However, there are some areas where the flow of information could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Consider using more varied linking words to connect your ideas.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the trends. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific data and by making more detailed comparisons.

Suggestions
  • Provide more specific data and make more detailed comparisons.
  • Consider using a wider range of structures to discuss the data.